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Myra Lee Ferreira

Post by Myra Lee Ferreira on Thu Mar 13, 2014 4:33 am

NAME: Myra Lee Kobayashi (née Ferreira)

AGE: 15

CLASS: Freshman

APPEARANCE: Tall, about 5’9”, with rich, silky midnight black hair that hangs down to her mid-back. She has a caramel complexion, leaning toward light mocha with eyes that are a glassy, onyx color that is as still and impenetrable as the deepest sea gloom. She is full-bodied and ample with natural curves due to her Brazilian heritage. A large scar trails across her throat from a switchblade injury she sustained from a fight between her father and stepmother. She was rendered mute since then and has used a metal voice-box to speak. She often wears a white, professional button-up shirt, a silver crucifix necklace, black slacks and polished professional shoes. A black vest sometimes adorns this outfit.      

BACKSTORY: Myra was born in the slums of Rio de Janeiro to two factory workers, one of whom, the mother, died giving birth due to her extremely weak and malnourished state (mostly as a result of a bad infection from a factory injury as well as a lack of sanitary living conditions). Myra’s father wed his next wife after a few years when Myra was 3 years old. Her stepmother was a woman who secretly earned her bread by way of body sales during secret events in Rio, especially in Copacabana nightclubs that provided services to corrupt government officials, religious clergy and celebrities. During the day, the woman worked as a child sitter and housemaid with little pay to supplement the family (She kept large sums of money hidden in a safe in Leblon. She kept her illegal activities out of sight and Myra’s father assumed it was due to late working hours at another job).        

Eventually, he found out and a large row broke out when she tried to lure Myra out of the house by force to auction her to prostitution. Myra was seven at the time. She cried out and woke up her father. The stepmother attempted to fight the man and do harm to him, threatening to get her employers involved. She eventually took out a switchblade that she kept in her back pocket and as she tried to slice at Myra’s father’s abdomen, Myra cried out and ran to him. The knife had cut her throat across with the girl passing out from shock and blood loss. In a blind rage, her father murdered the woman, choking her to death and breaking her neck. In the fast frame of events that followed, custody was revoked from Myra's father and subsequently, she was released to the custody of an orphanage run by the Catholic church after receiving much needed medical attention.

During this time from 7 to 12, Myra was subjected to awful treatment at the hands of the orphanage children and upper faculty. She had a tutor that came three times a week to help teach the orphanage children to read, write and do arithmetic. The woman took a special liking to Myra and secretly lent the young girl books which she read in earnest, one of which was the Children's Bible stories and, later, the Bible itself (which was a Portuguese translation of the Jeffersonian text). She took it upon herself to interpret the true words of Jesus Christ and accept him as her Lord and Savior. Myra believed the conditions that she had been put through prior and at the orphanage was a rigorous test to stand strong and fortify her waning faith (her father had long renounced his born religion so it was never taught).

It was during this time that a Japanese academic is in Rio doing a research thesis on class divisions and cultural division and has been living in the area for about two to three years. His name was Rei Kobayashi, a once leading sociology academic on class divide and apartheid at Tokyo University. He left from Japan to do hands-on research in Rio de Janeiro and complete his thesis on the subject. It was during a visit to the orphanage for research on youth in impoverished areas that he came across a recently beaten Myra after the tour, who immediately raced from the grasp of the head matron to the man, staring deep into his eyes and taking a tight hold of his hand. No one had wanted to adopt her prior to his coming there due to the ugly gash, muteness and dirty presentation of the girl who, by then, was crossing the threshold of puberty . Her eyes told a story to him right then and there but he had no intentions to suddenly adopt a random Brazilian child until he saw the bruises on across her body and the pleading in her eyes. That day coincided with the death of his wife and daughter in a train crash on the Chuo line. He took her in after a few weeks of visiting her, having caught the matron in the act of beating the child for wetting the bed, and filed a complaint of abuse for the unsanitary conditions and lack of child welfare in the institution.

Kobayashi finished the book at the end of that year and went back to publish it with Myra in tow. He taught her Japanese (written) himself along with a few supplementary outside classes to be able to get around and hold a somewhat advanced conversation. It also helped that the voice-box she acquired was one that had a translation function that translated dialogue that came to her, when she turned it on, by way of a miniature hearing aid-like device and then helped her translate her speech, as close as it can, from Portuguese to Japanese. Due to her strange mannerisms and the still present language and societal barrier, coupled with her inability to speak, she was sent to the consul of Yamaku Academy who deemed her eligible to attend - Kobayashi, a native Osakan, would only be a whisper away to monitor her and assist her if need be.        

PERSONALITY: Myra is a silent, mild-mannered person who mainly keeps to herself but does not mind a conversation with someone who can hold one and look past how should does it. She is a religious person, often seen praying during isolated periods of free time during the school day and has a strong moral core. Myra’s passive exterior hides the critical and scathing parts of her personality as well as lonely bitterness and contempt she has for modern society and adolescent trifles. She is deeply restless, a voracious reader, an eloquent and fiery speaker, highly intelligent and can be honest to the point of cruelty. If she is angered, one would take precaution and run; she will fight anyway she knows how if threatened as if fighting for survival. One can mainly intercept her near the mural where she usually lurks in the shade, the large oak on campus, the library where she spends a good amount of time, or her room.


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Post by Raiden on Thu Mar 13, 2014 9:02 am

This profile isn't bad at all - overall, it was very well-written and presented an interesting character. However, I believe some areas in it are in need of improvement. For example - while your spelling and grammar are good for the most part, you still make some mistakes that really stand out. I'm not sure if they're caused by not proofreading the profile before submitting it or because you genuinely didn't know that you had made them. Regardless, I believe it would be a good idea to give the profile another look or give it to somebody else to proofread. A mistake or two in your roleplaying posts is acceptable, but your character profile is pretty much here forever and will be referenced more than once by numerous people, which is why you should try to make it as good as possible.

Anyway, I have a few minor issues with the content as well. First of all -you mentioned that she's mute and she has spent most of her life in Brazil. In that case, I believe communication with the other students will be extremely difficult. I don't think any of the students speak Portugese, and Japanese is a notoriously difficult language to learn for anyone who hasn't spent at least 2-3 years doing just that. The fact that she was mute for most of her life will only make the situation even more difficult, so you should either try and find a way to work around that, or resort to having most of your roleplays be about non-verbal communication.

Another issue that I have comes up in her personality description, namely - some of the things you said there don't match up with the things you said in the backstory. First of all - if she is so religious, why wasn't that fact mentioned? Where did she learn how to pray? How did she retain her faith despite all the horrible things that happened to her? With religion being such a big part of her character, I think you should elaborate a little bit about that in the backstory. Also - Brazilian Jiu Jitsu? Where did she learn how to practice a highly complex martial art such as Jiu Jitsu when she spent most of her life in extreme poverty?
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Post by Myra Lee Ferreira on Thu Mar 13, 2014 1:35 pm

Fixed to your liking, I hope?
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Post by LQ-84i on Thu Mar 13, 2014 9:40 pm

I would concur that it is a very interesting character and for an initial view at the profile, you've done a better job than most who sent theirs in for the first time. I see that most of the points raised by another presiding admin have been addressed. A query I have is how Kobayashi was able to get Myra into Japan exactly. Was he able to use his report on her estate to successfully plead for her guardianship and quarter? Were there any difficulties in regards to getting approval from Japanese or Brazilian agencies or organizations? After this is noted, all that could be seen is a few places where you make errors in tense.

Now, as for a certain detail in your profile, that being the religion whilst understood to be Christian, I would like to know under what denomination is this under. I'd assume non-denominational but couldn't discern that otherwise. I state this being relatively important but not critical to your profile. You don't have to add it in, it's just curiosity on my part as it is stated to be a considerable part of the character. Mostly since doctrinal teachings and interpretations differ from one and another, this just alters how it would be acted upon in play. You could just address this in a forthcoming comment, not in the profile. Note: to be clear, you can address the point made in this paragraph in your next comment not the entirety.


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Post by Myra Lee Ferreira on Thu Mar 13, 2014 10:02 pm

Kobayashi made arrangements with the Japanese embassy in Brazil and followed international adoption laws, those designated to adopting children from Brazil. He got all her documents accounted for and made a profile for her that took from February to July to be accepted and cleared. There was a few issue regarding her medical disability but other than that, there was not many legal problems. Living in Brazil for some time made the process a bit easier.

As for Myra's Christian denomination, she is non-denominational.
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Post by LQ-84i on Thu Mar 13, 2014 10:37 pm

That will be all from me. You have my approval. Please await another admin's approval before continuing. 1/2
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Post by Subverse on Thu Mar 13, 2014 11:14 pm

And the second from me. Bienvenue, Myra. Feel free to start roleplaying when you want.
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